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D disliked starting each day.  She'd rather
squander her time writing of dusty dreams
late at night by candlelight.  This bothered

F who loathed the part where father must wake
unwilling daughter firmly from slumber.
Her eyes remain sleep-stained until M rakes

a warm washrag across her face.  Brother
e, now a teenager who refuses
to capitalize his name, walks sister

to the bus-stop where B drives them to school
with a frown on his face.  J, K, and L
form her usual clique.  They chat until rules

force them to part ways when they'd rather stay
and gossip about H--though, i don't know
what they see in him.  G drones on today

about grammar (they still teach that?) until
even the bell is exasperated
and offers to sound in pity and fill

the halls with familiar hullabaloo.
On the way to her next class, D spots O,
her friend whose affinity for junk food

has left her with contours that even eggs
must envy.  They walk to Mr. A's class
where algebra awaits and students beg

for a reprieve to no avail.  D sits
by Q who likes math after a quirky
fashion (and likes D more but won't admit

it).  O passes D a note from across
the room that depicts A as a hog-beast.
They're busted when D overzealously

giggles.  Mr. A remains unamused,
probably because the joke has nothing
at all to do with math.  Lunch!  D assumed

she would sit with J, K, and L; but boys
S, T, and U have monopolized their
attentions.  She sighs and quietly joins

the lunch line behind X and Z.  The pair
disagree as to who was first, but I
settles it by skipping past them both, fair

and impartially.  Y serves sloppy scoops
filled with foods of dubious origins.
D looks disgusted and barely recoups,

her skin a green avocadoes would die
for.  She gives up on lunch and hopes nurse N
will take pity on her condition.  "Lies,"

says N who clearly wasn't born yesterday.
D dutifully doodles through science
and history, wishing the day away

as any dedicated student would.
P and R were unimpressed with her day-
dreaming in their classes (which they think should

captivate any child's attention for
the duration) and plan to hold parent-
teacher conferences.  D heads for the door

as soon as she can and watches reruns
of The C Show on television until
F and M (physically) force her to turn

it off.  She locks her room and she pretends
she were more like voluptuous V with
a glamorous job.  She writes and suspends

the night with unfair tales of how W M
could be and jots down her ideas, too new
to replace her previous dusty dreams.
I was Q.

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Given 2005-02-23
A is for Algebra by ~jeconner takes a normal school day and adds a twist of math. ( Suggested by imperfect and Featured by ndifference )
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La-Dolly-Vita Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008
:clap: Great work, congrats on the DD :deviation:
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Pinocchio-Liez Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2006
Damn...and that's all I can say...Wow!
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GunShyMartyr Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2006
Ha! This amused me greatly. I'm impressed you managed to get a story in, too.

Well done. DD was well deserved. :)
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fraterm Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
Quite nifty. Didn't see this back when the DD occurred. Well deserved.
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daffodils Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2005
pure brilliance
you handle words with such vivacity and care, i admire your freedom
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pdRydia Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2005
A thoroughly enjoyable read. Thank you.
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jarofjuice Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
This was very fun to read :) Well worth the daily deviation.... great effort!
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Rikaierain Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
Hmm... That was fantastic :) I've never read anything written with a twist like that; I found it a very interesting read. Fantastic job.
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OpalRose Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
Did you ever tell D how you felt?
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jeconner Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
(crushed)
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dwilliams Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
Interesting stuff! Fun concept, once I got used to it!
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erikomyoujin Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
This is wonderful and insanely original. =) Makes me chuckle because it reminds me so much of what school is like.

I really hate algebra. =(
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jeconner Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
I like algebra. :nerd:

Hehe, thanks for reading. :)
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Faeroe Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
This is great. I can definately say you deserved the DD! :) :+favlove: I read it right after coming home from a bad day at school. Thank you. You made my day. :heart:
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nadster Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
that was so original, so cool. good work
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LinkinLuver13 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
I had fun reading this. :) Very interesting piece, very original.

:+fav:

Congrats on the Daily Deviation, too! :nod:
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:iconbiesty:
biesty Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005   Writer
I think this is one of the most creative writing ever.
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sisterjanet Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
This is really amusing. I like the subtlety of the rhythm, and the lack of rhyme.
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jeconner Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
=)
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BloodyPursuit Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
Wonderful originality, funny and meaningfull. :+fav:
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:iconbalancedvidiot:
balancedvidiot Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
very interesting piece, quite the concept. ah yes, the angsty existential world of teenage bullshit. how beautifully captured.
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jeconner Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
:)
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SuperegoAngst Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
I hate adding a favorite without leaving a comment. And I hate when I have nothing to add in the comment; I want something more to say than simply "plus-fave!" But what can I say that the others have not already commented on? It's a beautiful piece, with a wonderful idea behind it--did you miss the deadline? I think it's awful that it took a few months to get recognized, but such is the life of an author.

Well. Good luck in future endeavors. :+fav:
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jeconner Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
I know what you mean about not having anything to say; I've been there plenty of times.

Glad you liked it. :)
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Sonneillon- Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
heh. really enjoyed reading this. i can identify so much with this. :)
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evilmishie Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
I had fun reading this! Although, I'm not sure if the letters were just characters or if they represented someone specific, like in,

"M passes D a note from across
the room that depicts A as a hog-beast."

I thought M was mother... So, there are two M's? O_o; Oh, and I really liked the comparison in,

"D looks disgusted and barely recoups,
her skin a green avocadoes would die
for."

Anyway, bottom line: I really enjoyed reading this! +fav :D
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jeconner Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
I'm pretty sure I meant to say O. Nice catch. Will correct shortly.

Thanks.
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evilmishie Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
No problemo. =P
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fases Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
i loved this! you have such a particular style!
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danioc Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005  Professional Interface Designer
beautiful :clap:
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BlueAeroplane Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Parts of it in particular are so cleverly constructed. I agree with whoever it was who said that using letters instead of names takes away one's former preconceptions. The teenager e was such a wonderful addition.
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jeconner Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
Glad you liked it. Thanks. :)
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starrypawz Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very good I like it. :)
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Scope2k4 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
Now here's something you don't read everyday, although it did make mine.
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firelily24 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2004
I really like this. It kept me interested, and took me back to a time I thought I had forgotten... :)
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biggbuckz Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2004
oh this is awesome... took me so long to read it... soory :ashamed:... The C Show is ingenious... but the whole thing reads so smoothly... :thumbsup::thumbsup:
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jeconner Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2004
The C Show, yay! You're awesome, and thanks.
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ArmorFelix2001 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2004
For some reason I'm digging that nurse N :boing:
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westcoaster Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2004   Photographer
I don't usually bother with the whole Poetry section, but this is rather interesting. I actually enjoyed reading it.
I think that giving letters instead of names to each character is a wonderful device... and it takes away the personalities that we associate with certain namesm so that the reader focuses more on what is said and done than their preconceptions.
Anyway... cool. :thumbsup:
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imperfect Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
I love this!
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causticgit Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2004
Absolutely awesome. I love that you stuck with D throughout her entire day. The teen e is an excellent touch.

My fave bit: D looks disgusted and barely recoups,/her skin a green avocadoes would die/for."

:-D
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Dumb-Poet Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2004
This is a fantastic concept. As you have the impartial critique setting on I will not give you my full analysis, however, your capatalization is either inconisitent or ambiguos in its intention and I suspect it is the former. Although not capatalizing the first words of sentences is generaly not suggested I can understand completely as to why you would do that in this poem, but as I said I think a more consistent manner would go far. I must stop myself here lest I breach your request. If you do decide that you wish for a full critique then I would gladly oblige you, either way... Good Day ~* DP
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jeconner Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2004
Yes, yes. I know. I'll go back and capitalize. I've been lazy for far too long. ;)

A full critique is always welcome. I'd be interested to hear your thoughts.
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lizaroni Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2004
I hate A. He was my 10th grade teacher with absolutely no patience or teaching ability whatsoever. I feel for D.
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